Analysing Non-Fiction- Sample answer 鈥 version three
Question
Refer to both Extract 1 and Extract 2.
Compare how the two writers convey different attitudes towards helping homeless people.
In your answer, you should:
- compare their attitudes
- compare the methods they use to convey their attitudes
- support your ideas with quotations from both texts
Ireland and Dickens have different attitudes towards helping homeless people. Whereas Ireland鈥檚 article is upbeat and celebrates one charity鈥檚 success in 鈥減reventing homelessness and helping people into accommodation鈥, Dickens employs a more accusatory tone, stating that 鈥渢he growth of corruption鈥, meaning greed and the wrong values, has led to a terrible situation where homeless people are not receiving the help that they need.
Ireland opens with an image of volunteers 鈥渁t the ready鈥 as though they are eager to help, like a sprinter ready to compete. The adjective 鈥渂rave鈥 implies their willingness to face the cold and help those in need. Dickens opens with a tense situation, 鈥渇ace to face鈥, 鈥渇rightened by one another鈥; he is shocked by the homeless man and only tries to help as the situation arises. However, he uses this anecdote to educate others on the need to help homeless people.
Ireland uses quotations and anecdotes to emphasise the real human stories and create a personal feel to his article. He quotes Mr Kershaw鈥檚 metaphor that 鈥渢he charity was close to his heart鈥, the word 鈥渉eart鈥 implies how emotionally involved the volunteers can be. The anecdote about a formerly homeless man saying 鈥渢hank you鈥 moves the reader as they see the difference that the help has made to one individual. Although Dickens also focuses on an individual, he has a more distant attitude towards helping. He describes his act of charity as trying to give the 鈥渦gly object money鈥. The adjective 鈥渦gly鈥 implies disgust at the man鈥檚 appearance. The noun 鈥渙bject鈥 dehumanises the homeless man.
In Extract 1, the pun 鈥淏ox Factor鈥, hinting at the show 鈥榅 Factor鈥 and use of a 鈥淩obin Hood鈥 theme creates a lighter tone to the article. The allusion to Robin Hood implies that we should give to those who are less fortunate. The positive language choices, eg 鈥減opular鈥, 鈥渋mportant鈥, 鈥済reat鈥, 鈥渨elcoming鈥 work together to persuade the reader to help the charity too. Using a directly address 鈥渋t might surprise readers鈥 also involves the reader further. On the other hand, Dickens uses a far more serious tone in his essay, describing the homeless man鈥檚 clothing as a 鈥渓oose bundle of rags鈥. The phrase makes the reader imagine dirty scraps of material. The verbs 鈥渟hivered鈥 and 鈥渃hattered鈥 convey Dickens鈥 attitude that the man desperately needs help.
At the end of the article, Ireland employs statistics, eg 鈥渂rought in more than 拢30,000鈥 and directs the readers to when the next 鈥楤ig Sleep Out鈥 is and how to sign up. This persuades readers to agree with his attitude that helping is making a difference and that everyone should try to help. Like Ireland, Dickens encourages his reader to think about being more responsible. By focusing on the plight of the homeless children, Dickens arouses sympathy in the reader. A series of adjectives describe their desperate fight for survival as they 鈥渇ight鈥, 鈥渄art鈥, 鈥渄ive鈥 and 鈥渄odge鈥. The noun 鈥渟avage鈥 makes them sound wild and primitive. However, rather than fear them, Dickens鈥 metaphor 鈥渢he rain of their naked feet鈥 makes them sound innocent and vulnerable, he feels sorry for them.
Both writers persuade their readers that communities should help homeless people. Ireland leaves the reader feeling positive and 鈥渁t the ready鈥 while Dickens evokes guilt, persuading his audience that more must be done to help those in need.
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This answer:
- has an introduction and a conclusion, both of which refer back to the question
- uses details from the text, embedded into sentences, to support the points it makes
- uses connectiveA word or phrase used to join one part of a text to another, eg 'and', 'because' or 鈥榓dditionally鈥. throughout to show clear comparison between the texts
- selects the most striking words/phrases and explores their connotationAn idea or image which is suggested by a word, which is not its dictionary meaning, eg the connotation of 'desk' might be school.
- identifies methods, eg adjectiveA describing word. and anecdoteA short amusing or interesting story about a real incident or person.
- analyses both language and structure 鈥 also considers form and purpose
- compares how each text might affect the reader and leave them feeling
- demonstrates perceptive inferenceReading between the lines to work out things which are not explicitly stated in the text. when exploring the writer鈥檚 attitudes, eg 鈥榥aked feet鈥 makes the children sound innocent and vulnerable in Dickens鈥 view
- makes a number of comparative points throughout the answer 鈥 always bringing the focus on the writers鈥 attitudes into their analysis