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It is always a good idea to plan your answer before you begin writing. Having a plan means you will leave space to make all the points you want to, rather than risk running out of ideas.

Below is a structure that you could use for your answer:

1. Introduction – how is Holmes presented here?
2. How Holmes behaves in this extract.
3. How Holmes talks here.
4. How this compares to Holmes at the other points of the novel.
5. Concludion - summarise your points.

Sample answers

Here are two sample answers that refer to point 2 of the essay plan.

Sample answer 1

Holmes is presented as being confident in this extract which is from when we first meet him. He tells Watson that he is the best detective in the world. He says that he likes having problems to solve which shows us that he is clever and has an agile mind. He talks about creating a job for himself which is impressive to Watson. The words 'last' and 'highest' at the end show that he is arrogant about his abilities as a private detective.

Feedback comments – not bad but room for improvement!

• This answer shows that the candidate understands the character and has some sense of how language is used to convey meaning. However, a clearer explanation of the literary techniques used would be useful. For example, showing how dialogue is used in the extract.
• The candidate identifies that the extract is from the start of the novel. An improved answer would compare this presentation to scenes from later in the text.
• Some quotations are embedded, but more direct evidence along with analysis is required for a higher mark.
• Correct spelling and punctuation is used. For a higher level, more sophisticated language and use of technical language is needed.

Sample answer 2

In this extract from the opening chapter, Holmes is presented as being confident in his abilities as a 'private consulting detective'. Conan Doyle uses dialogue to show Holmes' arrogant character. He tells Watson that his mind 'rebels at stagnation' implying that he believes himself to be unusual in his inability to remain unchallenged. He goes on to a repeated list of imperatives 'Give me...', which emphasise how important challenge and stimulus are to him. The use of superlatives in the final line show how highly Holmes thinks of himself. The words 'last' and 'highest' at the end show that he is egotistical about his abilities as a private detective. This is designed to impress Watson, and has the same effect on the reader. This arrogance is shown to be justified by the way Holmes easily solves the mystery later in the novel.

Feedback comments – much better!

• The expression here is more sophisticated. Sentences are complex and ideas are confidently conveyed.
• The candidate makes use of appropriate terminology and begins to explore the effects of language on the reader.
• Some comparison with later parts of the novel is integrated in the response.
• Reference to historical context would make this an even better answer.

Using the skills you have learned and revised, have a go at answering the question. Time yourself and make sure you are meeting the Examination Board's assessment objectives.